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FMA Drabble: Bottoms Up! (Yaoi)

  • Sep. 13th, 2005 at 7:42 PM
Girl - Naughty Girl
Consider this a bit of a warm-up stretch before I get back into some serious fic-writing. This drabble turned out to be quite a bit more difficult then I expected it to be, however. 0_0 Ah well. It's a rather twisted nod to 'National Cliche Month'!

Title: Bottoms Up!
Pairing: Ed and Roy, natch
Genre: Smutty Crack
Rating: NC-17
Beta: [info]stickmarionette
Inspired by: A chat with [info]akira_chan
Summary: Your typical mini-skirt!Ed smut... or is it? IE: Kyt has fun with yet another cliche.



Bottoms Up!



Ed bit off a moan as hands slid across a sweat-slicked body to caress a nipple. They had been going at it for almost a half an hour now and he knew he was about ready to explode. And the feeling was only growing worse with each thrust. At least, from the sound of the Colonel's panting, he probably wasn't the only one.

He caught the other alchemist's dark eyes and was pleased to see a dazed look there. Yes, he definitely wasn't alone. Good.

A moment later, as if sensing his thoughts, Roy smiled at him mischievously and leaned closer, his tongue trailing across Ed's lips for one tantalizingly brief second. Their rhythm increased, and the blond let his lips part ever so slightly. An invitation the dark-haired man was only too happy to take.

As their kiss deepened, the younger man felt Roy's hands wander and settle on the soft material around Ed's hips. The same mini-skirt his lover had cajoled the Fullmetal alchemist into wearing before they did this.

"You know..." Ed paused as the still-exploring hands slid under the skirt to cup him, and groaned as they squeezed gently. "Your--" That jerk! "--Your mini-skirt fetish is really damn weird. Only you, I swear!"

There was a chuckle. "I didn't hear you complaining earlier, Fullmetal. In fact, if I recall correctly... you said you would if I let you--"

Ed pushed forward and into Roy once more, effectively silencing the man. Under him, his lover bit off a loud gasp, his hands tightening on Ed's new piece of clothing. It really was quite rewarding when he got Roy speechless in this situations.

Served him right for insisting on the damn skirt.

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[info]zalia wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 01:21 am (UTC)
Yay!! Kytfic!!! :D

Very funny ^_^ You did have me completely fooled with thinking Roy was on top. But the idea of having Ed in a miniskirt fucking Roy is fantastic!

*grins happily*
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 01:50 am (UTC)
Awwww. ^_^

I'm glad to hear! I found this to be an amusing concept but it was really hard to write down. 0_0

I'm glad it was misleading... and yes, I wrote this fic just for that mental image. It's hot, but hilarious!

*giggles*
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[info]strawberrykaoru wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 01:44 am (UTC)
Ooh TWIST! I love! *__*

*giggles at image of miniskirt!Ed*
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 01:51 am (UTC)
I like doing such things. :D

*laughs* And it's miniskirt!Ed fucking Roy into the bed. Mmmm! Now that's hot comedy!
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[info]crazy_toffee wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 01:58 am (UTC)
Because it's a joke on a joke:
Toffee: AHAAHAHAHAAH! Seme!Ed... in a SKIRT?
Toffee: You've killed me! XD
Kyt: I WIN.
Kyt: That's the goal!
Kyt: EVEN IN A SKIRT, ED CAN RIDE THE MUSTANG.

YOU SAID IT! NOT ME! *dies laughing*
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:04 am (UTC)
Re: Because it's a joke on a joke:
AND I DON'T REGRET IT EITHER. PONIES ARE MEANT TO BE RIDDEN, HA!
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[info]neuujazu wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:07 am (UTC)
<3~ Miniskirt Ed is teh awesome. =3! He deserves a little dominant time. >D!
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:14 am (UTC)
I have a certain fondness for crossdressing Ed, and did it in a few of my comm fics. XD But I could not resist twisting it just a liiiittle.

He does!

Glad you liked and thanks for reviewing!
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[info]akira_chan wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:07 am (UTC)
*snickers at other comments* I promise to write my fic later for you. XD
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:16 am (UTC)
We are crackheads. :D

Yay! Awesome!

Thanks!
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[info]liete wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:14 am (UTC)
< random >
I have fulfilled my half of the exchange =D

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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 02:28 am (UTC)
Re: < random >
OMG YOU RULE! XD

I shall do my half soon then, a bunny is a brewing!
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[info]chrstphrl wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 03:33 am (UTC)
HeeHeeHee! Ed's on top! Ed's on top! Love it.
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 03:35 am (UTC)
I love seme!Ed so.... but not enough to give up mini-skirt Ed at the same time! ;)

Roy obviously agrees with me.

Glad you liked! Thank you!
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[info]kesenaixtsumi wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 03:57 am (UTC)
XD Very, very cute.
Awesome job. Love your style.
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 04:58 am (UTC)
Why thank you! ^_^

That's always great to hear. *beams* I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for reviewing!
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[info]fma_addict1 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 04:03 am (UTC)
Brilliant.

I'd love it if Ed took a 'mustang' crack at the Colonel while he is on top.

:D <33
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 04:59 am (UTC)
*laughs* I'm glad! This fic was deceptively hard, really. 0_0

*snickers and might have to try that if she can think of a good way to present it and could keep it IC*

RIDE THE MUSTANG.

Glad you liked and thank you for reviewing!
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[info]sky_dark wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 04:09 am (UTC)
LOL, but Ed's so cute in drag! XD It must make Roy extra hot XD
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 05:00 am (UTC)
I quite agree! *drool*

I bet it does! I'm sure it does, in fact!

Glad you enjoyed and thank you for reviewing! ^_^
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[info]glorfindel wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:07 am (UTC)
wow that was sooo hot

and i thought roy was on top at first, that was really good use of writing techniques.
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:14 pm (UTC)
Why, thank you! I'm glad! ^_^

I was trying to be misleading, yes. Man, it was hard to describe a sex scene but give no clues as to who is being uke. 0_0 I'm happy it worked well, and again... Wow, thank you! You are too kind. :)

Thanks for reviewing!
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[info]ushigami wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 07:18 am (UTC)
Oh my gosh, that was brilliant. And like what everyone else was saying, someone needs to draw this thing... Or better yet, someone should make a doujin that shows the two in a moment of passion and all that jazz, but the morning after in the office, when people are asking why Ed's feeling so peachy, he'll reply with a "I rode a Mustang last night" comment, or something like that to that extent. And have Roy get all pissy and stuff... XD Where as Ed hates being called short, Roy probably hates all the connotations that come with his last name... XDXDXD

Now I want to draw that picture... But I've never actually drawn pr0n before, so... ^^;;;
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:16 pm (UTC)
Thank you, and I quite agree. A picture is needed for this type of scene. *laughs*

I still laugh when I think about my friend Prairie's reaction to Roy's name. "Roy Mustang?!" She said. "THAT SOUNDS LIKE A PORN STAR NAME."

It doesn't help he rather looks like one too. ;)

Ganbatte! *cheers you on*

Well, I'm happy you liked this! Thank you very much for reviewing!
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[info]cryogenia wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 08:29 am (UTC)
Mmmmm, skirt. Damn, this was hot <3
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:17 pm (UTC)
Ilikeskirts.

I'm glad! I hope it was funny too! :)

Thanks for reviewing!
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[info]tir_synni wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 12:51 pm (UTC)
Seme!Ed in a skirt! Yes! *mems*
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:21 pm (UTC)
It was too much for me to resist! XD *grins*

Wow, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed!
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[info]destinydivine wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 01:53 pm (UTC)
Now I get to walk around with the image of Ed wearing a miniskirt while he's fucking Roy. I totally think there are worse ways to spend my day :)
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:23 pm (UTC)
I think that's an EXCELLENT way to spend the day, really. XD *drool*

I was so amused when that bunny hit me, I really was.

Glad you liked the drabble! And thank you for reviewing!
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[info]velvet_mace wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 03:32 pm (UTC)
That was cute and dirty, and yes I was fooled until the end! Godo going!

Though your Ed has considerably more stamina than any of mine.
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:27 pm (UTC)
Score! Thank you. ^_^

I'm glad it read that well, I re-wrote parts of it several times. 0_0 Never had such a short fic give me so many problems before.

I blame Roy. :P

*laugh* Oh? Darn! I had had gestimated what the usual time was until climax, more or less. I was afraid of making it too short (didn't want to distract readers with "Ha ha, Ed is a sucky seme!") but I didn't want it to be silly-long either.

Ah well.

Ed has.... determination... yes. :D

Glad you liked it and thank you so much for reviewing!
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[info]wa666 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 05:03 pm (UTC)
Reminds me of the Time I got my bf in a school girl uniform and he told me MY School girl Fetish was weird XD. Its not werid to like School Girls! IS IT!!!
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:28 pm (UTC)
NOT AT ALL. SCHOOL GIRLS ARE THE BEST. *thumbs up*

Good going! *hands you cookies and grins*

Hope you liked the fic then!
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[info]diamondkat06 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 05:18 pm (UTC)
heeee that made me happy !
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 06:30 pm (UTC)
Really? Great! ^_^

*is glad to make people happy*

Glad you liked it! Thank you for reviewing. :)
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[info]qem_chibati wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 09:21 pm (UTC)
o.o;

One word. Brilliant!

I did think this bit was strange

-He caught the other alchemist's dark eyes and was pleased to see a dazed look there. Yes, he definitely wasn't alone. Good.-

Because to me that sounds more like the person on top. o.o;

But the twist was oh just so perfect.

I probably came better off for not reading the summary, because I just wasn't really expecting the twist despite that hint you provided.

- It really was quite rewarding when he got Roy speechless in this situations. -

This line was perfect, just as the ending was.
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 02:51 am (UTC)
Wow, thank you!

Hm? Really? I was hoping it was pretty vague. Ed's on top and looking down at Roy, who is likewise looking up. (Yeah, I know that takes some creative bending... ^_^;;) The fact that Roy looked pretty dazed was supposed to be a hint that Roy was uke-ing it. Hm. *ponders the line*

I'm glad!

Good idea! I tried not to hint at the order at all. Normally I say who is topping and bottoming, but not this time!

Ed = Cocky little guy, sometimes. :D

*blushes* I'm glad you enjoyed! Thank you so much for reviewing. ^_^
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[info]sailorrob wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 11:03 pm (UTC)
my brain hurts
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 02:47 am (UTC)
And here I thought you'd be amused by the mental image of a guy in a mini-skirt being all man and pwning! :D

This is hardly fair, you finally read a fic of mine and it's probably the dirtiest and most wrong one I've ever written. Where were you when I was writing the fluffy PG-13 stuff, huh? HUH?

Go mini-skirts!
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[info]ikuyona wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2005 11:18 pm (UTC)
*sigh*... The mental image was wonderful.

Y'know, I always squee in absolute joy whenever I see a new EdxRoy or RoyxEd fic from you! ^^ You never let my inner-fangirl down.

Much love, as always! ^__^
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 02:54 am (UTC)
I'm rather fond of tha mental image myself. *happy sighing*

Aww! *blushes* Thank you! I'm just glad everyone seems to enjoy my fics. ^_^ I have fun writing them, and love spreading the OTP love!

*loves right back* Thank you!
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[info]ithronluin wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 03:40 am (UTC)
*reads all the comments*
Riding a mustang? Edward? XD Oh how I like that mental image going into my head now. Someone should draw that... *cackles*

The bunny bit you pretty hard, kyt. That's a wonderful piece. XD
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 03:49 am (UTC)
I quite agree!!! WHY DO I KEEP GETTING A MENTAL IMAGE OF ED IN COWBOY GEAR, THOUGH??

Aww, thank you! I'm glad you liked. ^_^

I got like... 20 more bunnies all raring to go, I think. 0_0 Mostly uke!Roy, lately. Wow, I'm a fangirl.

Thanks for reviewing! :)
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[info]moon_wing wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 06:26 am (UTC)
LOL!!! That's great!!
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 04:41 pm (UTC)
Why thank you! ^_^ I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Thanks for reviewing!
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[info]madrona_8 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 07:13 am (UTC)
Relieved to see I wasn't the only one who thought Roy was on top. You got me. Nice a smutty and not too long. Just what I need before going to bed. Thanks!
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 04:43 pm (UTC)
*laughs* I was trying to mislead, so I'm glad! :D

Awww, I'm glad to hear that! Heh, my fics often tend to be on the short side (this one was by design, I've found joke fics lose it if they are too long). I'm new at doing smutty fic, so it's great to hear it's good!

^_^

Thank you for reviewing!
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[info]devils_devotion wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 02:12 pm (UTC)
Whew. WAY TO FOOL ME, KYT!!!!!! Now excuse me while I die from laughter. XDDDDDDDD

(This review brought to you by OMG CAPSLOCK)
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[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2005 04:44 pm (UTC)
MISSION ACCOMPLISHED, WOOT! XD

Laughing = Good!! I was hoping this was funny!

(GO CAPSLOCK!)

Glad you liked and thanks for reviewing!
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