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Fic: Fall (Yaoi)

Girl - Naughty Girl
Title: Fall
Pairing: Roy x Ed
Spoilers: Eh, post episodes 40/41
Warnings: NC-17. PWPish, angsty or at least dark, and not a fluffy take on the OTP, I guess.
A/N: Rabid bunny just bit me. ^_^;; Not really beta-ed and only my second try at smut. So it probably sucks. Hope you enjoy anyways! Feel free to beta-attack in any way.
Encouraged by: [info]zalia

EDIT: [info]celes_grant who kind, wonderful, and SUPER TALENTED made me some fanart for this fic. It can be found: here!



Fall



He was falling.

"Aaah, Colonel!" Edward Elric's fingers, one warm flesh and the other cold metal, dug into his back. It hurt, but only in that numb distant way. The way it had hurt when the brothers had run. Had left Lior without a word to him...

"Stop thinking." The blond leaned up, pink tongue snaking out of his mouth. A second later their lips were locked. As usual, it was furious. More of a battle than a mere make out session.

Or like their lovemaking... No, sex... Always turned out. Quick, hot, and empty. His fingers entwined in Ed's long locks, sweaty flesh slapping against sweaty flesh, and no endearments spoken.

Maybe none were needed. However, Roy certainly did not plan on investigating.

He probably already knew the answer.

His lover broke the kiss, trailing one long last taste across Roy's lips before again bringing his arms up and around the dark haired man. Instead of clutching at him again, this time they grabbed, pulling Roy down and further into the younger man.

He gasped as Edward immediately tightened, muscles clenching. "Fuck..." It was too much.

Roy was panting now. Damn it. He was dripping with sweat, shaking like a leaf, and with this... this damn teenager below him and smirking like he just won some prize.

The women... the lovely young ladies who smiled politely over at him during work, giggled behind their hands when he told them how attractive they were, or eagerly agreed to dinner out when asked instead of taking it as some sort of insult and storming away...

It was never like this with them. It was never an 'either or' 'give then take' sort of situation. And certainly they would never leave town without a word, clearly not trusting--

Not...

Ed shifted towards him, golden eyes smoldering then shutting as the blond moaned then pulled away ever so slightly. The teen then repeated the motion, hips pushing closer then leaving far too quickly.

Roy was going to lose it.

He was going to lose it, and then the little minx would grin at him, leaving in the middle of post-coital snuggling. Roy would never receive an explanation for Lior or for Edward's lack of trust in him. In fact, his lover would probably be at least two towns over in the morning.

"Aaaaah!"

The world flashed as he got his release. It was both far too soon and something that had taken forever. The blond slowly opened his eyes again, a hand reaching up to cup Roy's cheek and stroke gently.

Roy Mustang was falling. He knew this.

He just didn't know if he wanted it to stop.

Comments

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[info]shuki_ai wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 01:31 am (UTC)
^__________^♥

I love your fics. 'Nuff said. ^_~
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 02:17 am (UTC)
And I love you! And totally wouldn't be writing if not for you me thinks. *glomps*
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[info]devils_devotion wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 01:46 am (UTC)
Wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee~! *squeeing fades away into the hills* Ah, it was so dark and dramatic and NON-FLUFFY and I loved it. *_* I dunno, something about it really struck a chord with me.

If this isn't friendslocked, then I'm so pimping it on the LJ. XD;;
[info]bard_linn wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 01:51 am (UTC)
It's not. Quick, go! RUN! POST!
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[info]bard_linn wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 01:59 am (UTC)
I don't know how to feel about this.

*shoots voice screaming "What is it with people messing with my OTP this week?"*

Part of me is going "I can totally see this happen. It's very realistic within the series" in the sense that Roy and Ed do lack that trust between them as demonstrated toward the end of the series.

I really love the ending either way. ^_^ Good fic Kytyn.
[info]devils_devotion wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 02:05 am (UTC)
*shoots voice screaming "What is it with people messing with my OTP this week?"*

...You wouldn't happen to be talking about me, would you? ^^;; Sorry.
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[info]cephiedvariable wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 02:58 am (UTC)
Ahhh, I loved this. ^___^ It fits nicely with my general opinion that Ed would be all like: "OMG SEX! YAY!" and Roy would be all like: "OMG LOVE! FUCK!"

Silly Roy. So emo.

Uh, whee? ^____^

Oh! Oh! By the way... do you still want a layout?? I just COMPLETED MY LAST DAY OF HIGH SCHOOL so I've got lots of free time now. Whoo.
[info]bard_linn wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 03:06 am (UTC)
Congrats on graduating! That's tough. ^^
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[info]devils_devotion wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 03:31 am (UTC)
New comment thread, ow! *ass still hurts*

Mmmm, "Pater, Peccavi" means "Father, I have sinned" in Latin. Hime's pic post inspired me, henceforth, I have a rabid Ed X Hoho-papa bunny gnawing at my nipples. ^_^ Ow.
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 03:35 am (UTC)
Interesting....

........

I'm uh, gonna have to kill you for that mental image now. :D OwMyBrain.
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[info]sky_dark wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 05:42 am (UTC)
Oh fuckin' rocks! *runs to pimp*
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 05:53 am (UTC)
You guys really do like the angst, don't you? XD

(I'm not worthy!!! Think of your poor f-list! :o )
[info]velvet_mace wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 06:57 am (UTC)
Sweet -- angst and lust in equal measures. Ed pwns Roy. Nice.
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 02:20 pm (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^

I rather like seeing Roy pwned, I think. :D
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[info]celes_grant wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 07:59 am (UTC)
omg. LOVE the Ed making Roy gasp. much much love to you for that. Even though RoyxEd isn't my OTP... I can SO see this >3
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 02:21 pm (UTC)
*hugs* Thank you very much!
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[info]lanerose wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 03:35 pm (UTC)
::snuggles:: Sugoi sugoi!!! ^_^
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 06:09 pm (UTC)
*snuggles back* Domo Arigatou!

(Hey, how is overseas treating ya?)
[info]emptybackpack wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 04:44 pm (UTC)
-beat beat beat- You are a good writer. BELIEVE. -beat-
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 06:10 pm (UTC)
Mmmm, S&M....

Thank you for saying so! *flush* I'm not quite sure I am yet, but I am certaintly working hard on it!

Glad you liked the story. ^_^
[info]zalia wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 10:30 pm (UTC)
Loved it last night... still love it now ^___^

Write more fic damn it!!!
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 10:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^

Just try and stop me!
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[info]crazy_toffee wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 10:46 pm (UTC)
DAMN this was good! I love it in fics when it's Roy who's falling for Ed, and unable to get his footing back. I think it's an interesting dynamic, more so than Ed being the one who does the hopeless fawning. It would be a much bigger issue for Roy to find himself taken under by a kid like Ed... at least I tend to think that way.

The struggle you drew out here was beautiful, in how Roy doesn't know how much or how little he wants. And Ed... ooof, unpredictable and smirking Ed... Time for Roy to angst over what that smile hides? ^.^ Ah, I dunno, this was just lovely.
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 11th, 2005 10:55 pm (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^

I really am fond of turning a lot of stereotypes around, and was wanting to do something like this. Plus I like Roy having the more uke-like traits. I agree with you there...!

Mmmm, Roy!angst. *drools*

Thank you again! You are too kind. :) Very glad you liked.
[info]mikkeneko wrote:
Jun. 12th, 2005 01:55 am (UTC)
Good fic. And it wasn't THAT angsty...
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 12th, 2005 01:59 am (UTC)
Thank you!

...Yeah, perhaps I exaggerated somewhat. ^_^;; I'm used to doing this couple (or heck, most of my OTPs) in a far more cheerful light then this... *goes to tweak warning somewhat*
[info]anime_monster wrote:
Jun. 12th, 2005 05:50 am (UTC)
THIEF!!!! COME BACK HERE!!! *chases [info]kytyngurl2 for heart* This fic=love. *isn't very cognitive at this moment*
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 12th, 2005 06:03 am (UTC)
EEEEEeeeeEEE! *highly complemented* ^___^ Thank you so much!
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[info]ithronluin wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2005 12:04 pm (UTC)
Definately my favorite pairing. XD You wrote the fic splendidly! Write more! I'll look forward for your upcoming ed/roy fics. ^^ The plot just ran along smoothly and Roy being uke is so so unheard of. Too many fics with Edward being uke -_-;

I have to say it's a kinda a turn on for Edward I presume. Roy being er...helpless for once. XD


*bashes self*
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2005 12:13 pm (UTC)
It's mine too. ^__^ And thank you! Has done some other Roy x Ed fics before, plus one after this. But most are Fluff or Humor at this point. I fully plan on trying to explore darker themes more often in the future though.

Yeah, I really like having Roy with the uke-ish traits. I think he has enough emotional weaknesses to pull it off just fine. XD Plus it's kinda hot. Plus everyone does uke!Ed gosh darn it! *smiles*

It would be! I mean, especially if you are a teenager and are still trying to find your limits and prove you are an adult. Having an authority figure, an ATTRACTIVE one... helpless...?

Thank you for the great review!
[info]timchell wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2005 05:41 pm (UTC)
Heh heh...Ed so totally pwns Roy...
Even if Ed is the uke, he TOTALLY pwns Roy. And you're right, this is angsty...poor Roy hasn't gotten used to being a boy toy yet. *snerk*


*huggles you lots for your awesomeness*
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2005 05:50 pm (UTC)
Re: Heh heh...Ed so totally pwns Roy...
*laughs* Well, I guess Ed is just full of pwnage. :D

*nods* I don't think he quite expected it!

*huggles back* Why thank you! ^_^
[info]asidian wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2005 08:48 pm (UTC)
Wow. O_o

It's nice to see a fic where Roy's fallen for Ed for a change. And really well-done, too. Glad that you got the sting of the Lior incident in there- nice touch, that. ^_^
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2005 11:06 pm (UTC)
...Take it you liked? :)

I... really like sort of twisting around the stereotypes, I guess. Plus I can see Roy with many more of the 'uke' traits than Ed. I'm so glad it was well done and that you liked the Lior reference!

Thank you for your kind words and review!
[info]sirath wrote:
Jun. 15th, 2005 02:34 am (UTC)
ahhhh....*sniffles* I like this muchly, not psychotically dark but still quite rooted in reality. Mustang is in control less and less in ficcies now which can be quite a good thing. (fer teh porny slash bunnies who prefer Ed/Roy)
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jun. 15th, 2005 02:58 am (UTC)
Such high praise! *happy sigh and flushing*

I like seeing Roy without his control... so it's becoming common now, eh? Interesting! :)

Yay, Ed x Roy!
[info]moothril wrote:
Aug. 5th, 2005 06:21 am (UTC)
Gaahh, I remember reading this awhile back and loving it! I think I might have been too shy to say anything...>__> I don't know.

Anyways, I like this, because it shows just how dysfunctional Roy and Ed's relationship probably would be. And that's something I really like about Roy/Ed! They're not perfect and wonderful, and their personalities do crash. :D I think you captured that perfectly here~

this damn teenager below him and smirking like he just won some prize.

HAHAHA!!
Ed: But, Roy, you are a prize! *eyelashes*
Roy: ....Don't let the fangirls get to your brain, Edward!

*cackles*

And I like the last two lines, as always. ^__^ Great closings make me happy. Not Roy though...*dumps bucket of angst on Roy*

[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Aug. 5th, 2005 01:36 pm (UTC)
...Shy?! Really? :o

I quite agree, so I'm glad I showed that well. Despite what most of my drabbles and ficlets show, it's likely any relationship those two have will be full of clashes and friction...

(Damn, that sounds dirty!)

Leaving Roy speechless is kind of like winning a prize! XD

I always try to close well, so I'm glad to hear that! And yes, poor Roy! T_T

Glad you liked it so... I'm really flattered, thank you!
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[info]lynx212 wrote:
Jul. 19th, 2006 11:13 am (UTC)
Bravo
Very well done... loved it~
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Jul. 22nd, 2006 08:07 pm (UTC)
Re: Bravo
Thank you very much! :) I really appreciate it...!

This was one of my first truly 'good' fics and I'm still rather proud of it. ^_^
(Anonymous) wrote:
Sep. 8th, 2006 08:51 pm (UTC)
homg!
So great. ^^
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2006 01:14 am (UTC)
Wow, thank you! I'm really glad you liked it! :)
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