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FMA: First Steps (Gen, Ed-Centric)

Girl - Naughty Girl
Title: First Steps
Timeline: Pre-Series
Rating: G
Genre: Gen, slightly angsty
Warnings: Drabble, otherwise none
A/N: Just trying a little something before I prepare to do some promised-fics for people. Obey me, Muses!!!



First Steps


The young blond boy took a deep breath, braced himself, then stood up and prepared to try again.

His pants had messy green stains on the knees now, evidence of the many many falls he had already had that day. Most of his lower half also ached painfully. But that wasn't going to stop him. He would not let it.

He could hear the two taller individuals, one male and one female, behind him. They were making encouraging noises but made no move to help him. He didn't care, he wanted to do this himself. He could do this himself!

Edward ignored the pair in favor of taking a hesitant and wobbly step forward. And, for only a moment, he was upright. Standing tall and proud on his admittedly weak and short legs, the way he should.

The next thing he knew, he was on the ground again, his backside smarting even as his face burned a bright red. Failure had struck yet again.

"Ed..." Her voice was concerned as she took a step forward.

The boy waved her off with a look. This pain didn't matter to him, after all. With a deep sighing breath, Edward Elric, age eleven, stood up to try walking again.

He wondered, distantly, if it was this hard the first time around.

Comments

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[info]acdragonmaster wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:27 pm (UTC)
Aww... Ed learning to use his automail. Poor kid...
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:30 pm (UTC)
*has a not-too-secret deep love for fics dealing with Ed's automail*

Plus, as I just said to you... Learning how to walk again has to hurt. Especially when you have Ed's pride.
[info]mikkeneko wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:45 pm (UTC)
I really did think it was chibi-Ed. And that would have been SO cute. But this has the added element of parallelism. :)
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:50 pm (UTC)
You were supposed to think it was! I was going for the whole "Wow that's so cute--- OMG Angst!!!" effect. :D

Sounds like it worked. *happy*
[info]bard_linn wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:48 pm (UTC)
T_T

*glomps Ed*

*hugs Kytyn*
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:51 pm (UTC)
*smiles and hugs back*

There there, he did eventually learn... and faster than expected too! *is proud of Ed*
[info]bard_linn wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 10:56 pm (UTC)
*joins you in being proud*
[info]shuki_ai wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 11:30 pm (UTC)
Nice job! I thought it was Ed when he was first learning to walk as a little child...and then BAM! - angst. XD;; Much love for your writing! ::hugs::
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 11:37 pm (UTC)
Aww shucks, Stephy. ^_^

*hugs back*
[info]zalia wrote:
May. 8th, 2005 11:51 pm (UTC)
*glomps*

Poor Ed!! *huggles him*

I do love the similarities ^_^
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 9th, 2005 12:08 am (UTC)
*joins in the huggling, of course*

Thank you! <3
[info]tsukitaichou wrote:
May. 9th, 2005 02:48 am (UTC)
That's so sad...but really sweet. ^^;
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 9th, 2005 02:54 am (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^ That was the effect I was going for...
[info]tsukitaichou wrote:
May. 9th, 2005 03:00 am (UTC)
You totally succeeded. ^^
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 9th, 2005 03:11 am (UTC)
Wai! ^_^
[info]forgottenlover wrote:
May. 13th, 2005 12:26 pm (UTC)
::smirks:: heh heh heh likey
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
May. 16th, 2005 02:20 pm (UTC)
*smirks back* I like twists.
[info]forgottenlover wrote:
May. 16th, 2005 05:58 pm (UTC)
and do the twist! nah nah nah, nah nah nah!
[info]l_envyxedward_l wrote:
Aug. 18th, 2005 01:48 am (UTC)
so sad.....this makes me wanna draw a lil doujin to this story T_T
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Aug. 18th, 2005 02:05 pm (UTC)
I'm super-glad you liked! ^_^

............

OMG I'd love you forever if you did! *bounces and hugs*

I'm happy you enjoyed it and thank you very very much for reviewing! *offers chocolates*
[info]threeonetwo wrote:
Oct. 21st, 2005 01:07 am (UTC)
Aww. You're really good at twists. And this was sad, yet cute.
[info]kytyngurl2 wrote:
Oct. 21st, 2005 01:31 am (UTC)
*likes hearing that* I seem to like doing twist stories. I'm surprised more people don't call me on that! 0_0 Also, I like doing fics with multiple 'layers'... like sad!cut, angst!fluff, and the like. No idea why!

I'm happy you enjoyed it... Thank you so much!
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